I got lost in a local

 I got lost in a local

Have you ever been lost? Well, one weekend my family and I went shopping, at that time I was very young and I got tired very quickly so I fell asleep with my brothers in the car and my parents went shopping for clothes, but about 30 minutes later I woke up and I got out of the car to look for my parents but I did not find them because the place was very big, after about 20 minutes I got scared and went to the parking lot very scared, but when I got there I couldn't find the car so at the door of the place there was a guard and he asked me if I was ok and I told him no I was very scared because I couldn't find my parents and the car was gone so the guard told me not to worry if I knew my parents' number and I told him yes I knew my dad's number so at that moment I gave him the number and I called him right away my dad answered and the guard told him that I was in the parking lot and he told him that I was in the parking lot and he told me that I was in the parking lot and he told me that I was in the parking lot. The problem is that that day we had blankets with us and my sister had been covered up to her head and my parents thought that I was there with her and my little brother at that moment they were about to enter the house so they had to go back and my mother was too worried at that moment, 25 minutes went by and my parents arrived very scared and worried about me and by that time I was already at the door of the store a little nervous so they saw me and calmed down a lot but the guard was very upset and told my parents that they were going to leave me alone so my parents told the guard what had happened and that they had not realized that I was not in the car the guard said that for the next time it is important to see that we are all inside the car I was already inside the car very scared, When I came back my parents told me not to do that because I could have been robbed and that they would also notice as long as we were all inside the car.

 

 

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  1. Good night Cristina, I like and enjoyed your personal narrative and also it is similar to a case that I know, fortunately nothing happened there. Now, I like how you tell the story about that experience, I did not saw grammatical mistakes in your text. Something that you can improve is the organization on your Paragraphs, it is difficult to difference between one and other paragraph, and I do not know where the Paragraph begins and end. Other thing that you can improve for make the text more interesting for the readers view if introducing more images, the whole text only have one image and at the end, you can put a little bit more of images for giving a better view and understanding about it.

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